Ivy Kimimora (WIP)

[angelliccupcake]

::CHARACTER NAME:: Ivy Kimimora

::CHARACTER OVERVIEW::

FACE CLAIM: Hatsune Miku - Vocloiad
AGE: 10
GENDER: Female
DATE OF BIRTH: December 21st
RANK: Genin
VILLAGE: Kirigakure

::CHARACTER APPEAREANCE::

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION:

Ivy is 4 feet 7 inches, she is 79.2 pounds. Everyone says she's short but she considers herself average. She is skinny but strong somehow. Her size doesn't account for her strength.
Her long light blue hair is mesmerizing to most people, it's almost white. She keeps then in two pigtails when training and on missions but has it out on an occasional basis. Her eyes are also similar to her hair. She has light blue orbs that seem almost white.Ivy also has a slender figure and is somewhat flat chested.

CLOTHING DESCRIPTION:

Ivy always wears either a pink and black crop top, and long black pants with her pink ninja shoes, OR a black crop top with her black pants and black ninja shoes. This outfit is only for training and missions. Pink is only to be worn on everyday things like going to the park, taking a walk, or just in the house.

Ivy always wears a black ribbon in her hair. Her mother gave it to her the day she died, saying it would help her remember her and that she would always be with he no matter what. Ivy can has so many hair accsessories to choose from but she keeps on the ribbon, and only takes it off to sleep.

::CHARACTER DETAIL::

FAMILY AND FRIENDS:

• Mom: Deseased - Kimimora Akuma
  
• Dad: Kimimora Mikami- Unknown ANBU
  
• Tami (Pet/Beast kitten, used in jutsu.)

PERSONALITY:

Ivy is a very non-talkative person not shy, just non-talkative((Similar to Shino)). She’s always mistakingly hangs out with the wrong crowds. At times she can get into a bit of trouble, but other times she'll be seen studying or training. When she’s around certain people, for example boys, or people of a higher rank than her, she acts like a whole new person, shy.

Also, she only hangs out with her father. She doesn't have too many friends. Ivy wishes to make more friends, but it seems to be hard for her mother and her father. In the acadamy, she rarely raises her hand, or rarely seems to be paying attention. But it shows in her work and training, it shows that she does.

Ivy is also a heavy day-dreamer, meaning that at the most random times, she looks out a window and day-dreams. On dull days when there is nothing to do, she will sit at home and try to draw. Even though she is a terrible drawer, she’ll do it anyway because it takes away the boredom.

HISTORY:

Ivy has had a pretty rough past. When she was about 3, her mother had been killed right in front of her. Someone had snuck up on her and slashed her in the back. Ivy and her defenseless state had cried, screamed and shook her mother, telling her to wake up. Her mother’s last words were “Ivy, I love you and I want you to stay with good people. Cherish this with your life and be a good girl, just for mommy.”

This had had a huge impact on her life. For another 3 years after that she had been in a depression. Her father had tried cheering her up day after day, days turned to months and months turned to years, until he had stumbled upon a small lost kitten, such a small baby. It looked hungry, tired, lonely and sad. On Ivy’s 7th birthday she had gotten the kitten and gained her happiness once again.

Tami, her pet kitten will always be there with her anywhere and everywhere. Missions she is hidden in the trees or somewhere on Ivy. When she’s sleeping, Tami lays on her stomach or next to her and sleeps as well.

Her father being a ninja in Kirigakure, has only a few hours a day to spend with her, so with that said she's usually off to adventure out as she pleases. Having not too many friends, she plays with her kitten and trains. Her training times are from dawn till school time, or from dawn to the time of the mission. On regular days off she spends at least half of her day training. She doesn't want to fail her mother nor her father!

::JUTSU AND WEAPONS::

WEAPONS:

Ivy really has all the typical weapons for an average Genin except a few:

Exploding Pouch-A variation on the exploding note, these small pouches can be attached to a target and then explode a few seconds later.

Makibishi -This weapon is primarily used during escape, numerous makibishi are thrown on the ground and enemy soldiers will have a difficult time pursuing because the spiked metal can penetrate the sole of the shoe wear.

A Few Senbon (Needle)-The senbon was first used by doctors in acupuncture, it was then adopted by ninja and Hunter-nins to hit points on the body to cause death, deaden limbs or cause their target to fall unconscious.

Ear plugs-It isn't really a wepon but special type of ear plug that cn block ot any sound or jutsu that she or other sound ninja make. She uses it while training, on missions or just to ignore a person.

KEKKAI GENKAI / CLAN JUTSU:

CHAKRA NATURE: Wind and Sound

JUTSU:

Ventriloquism Skill [Fukuwajutsu]-The user uses their own mouth to transmit chakra and essentially bundle up sound until they want to release it. This allows them throw their voice or move any sounds they can make with their mouth to any location without the sound fading. If they know where a person's ear is, they can use this to actually whisper into it. | Academy | This jutsu does not require hand-seals ( naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Empty_Cicada_Shell_Technique)

Henge no Jutsu: Transformation Skill
Description: An illusionary jutsu that gives the user the appearance of another person or object. A commonly used skill.

Juujuin Bunshin:Beast Human Clone
(Beast/Human Effect)
Description: Used in combination with an animal partner. Chakra is used to reform the animal into an exact replica of the human - or vice versa, with the human becoming an animal. A lose of power in the transformed body - will cause a revert into the original self. In this case, Ivy uses her cat, Tami.

Kawarimi no Jutsu: Body Substitute Skill
Description: A common jutsu - used to quickly replace a body with a close by object. Creates confusing among the opponent(s) - creating a chance to escape, or return with a larger strike. Useful for avoiding attacks, and hiding from potential enemies.

Kaze no Yaiba:Wind Blade
Description: Creates a blade of wind, that is impossible to block. Requires no tool to perform.

Gantai no jutsu (Bandage skill)
Description: One of the first techniques that a Medical Ninja must learn. Reasons why is because these techniques are what matters between life and death. This is a special type of technique in which a medical ninja is capable of making bandages by using their surroundings such as sand, grass water and others with the help of using chakra.

Sansokyoukyuu (Oxygen supply)
Description: An easy justu for the Medical Ninja. A ninja uses chakra upon the chest area focusing it to help the body in some ways. It helps the lungs expand easier making the chest and neck muscles become more officient which allows the airways to expand and pulmonary blood vessels so then the cells of the body may breathe easier.

Kanetsu no Gyou (Heat seeker)
Description: A simple Jutsu in which the Medical Ninja focuses the chakra in his body by placing it along the persons chest creating heat within them. This is so then the person would not be in danger of Hypothermia, a condition in which the body starts dropping its temperature at a quick pace, and if goes untreated it might cause paralysis and even death. One must be careful for if used to long then it may warm up a part of the body which may cause fever.

Ketsuki Gyouko (Blood Coagulation)
Description: A simple healing technique. The user uses his chakra on his wound to make the blood there coagulate quickly. The wound still remains but the bleeding stops. It goes quickly for small wounds but larger ones need a couple of minutes to finish the coagulation. It can also be used on wounded allies.

::PLAYER INFORMATION::

ALIAS: Aliyah
GENDER: Female
AGE: 14

TIMEZONE/LOCATION: Central Time, US
CONTACT:Messengers: [e-mail], [e-mail], and my IMVU AngellicCupcake
RP EXPERIENCE: I’ve RP’ed for a while now, 2 to 3 years
HOW’D YOU FIND US?: I’m also on a site called Ouran Next Generation. And I looked up “Naruto Shinobi” On Google and I got this forum

RP SAMPLE:

I laid on my bed in my bright pink room studying for the final exam. 'I can't wait! This is going to be amazing' I thought. I couldn't get my mind off of it. I've been practicing day and night, before i went to the academy and even after! I pushed myself day in and day out knowing I have to do this. I know my mother would be proud of me if I passed. Daddy always practices with me, making sure I have good form, my stance is good and making sure my hand postitions are good as well...I know...Mom would be proud...'

I kept studying and then i felt a small warm furry body on my back. I looked over to see Tami laying on me. I continued to study and study for about another 2 hours, Tami falling asleep.

I closed my book and sighed. My back started to hurt slightly and i blinked."You need more exercise Tami. Hehe, your getting a little chubby." I stated turning and picking her up. She meowed softly and i placed her on my stomach to take a break. She had got up, walked a little closer to my face and nuzzled my cheek. I smiled cheerfully and giggled

"I love you too" I giggled once again. She hopped off of me onto the bed and I got up. I ran downstairs and she followed slowly. Once I got downstairs and saw my father with a bunch of paper work.

"I'll be training!" I said anxiously, putting my training shoes on. He smiled and nodded.
"Be back in 2 hours." He stated.
"WHAT?! 2 HOURS?! B-BUT! I NEED TO TRAIN LONGER!" I complained. He sighed and looked at me.
"2 hours..." He repeated. I sighed nodded and ran outside. I went to the academy training grounds and started out with meditation. Nobody comes there on the weekends, so i usually train there. Tami walked slowly to me and sat on the side watching.

Once i gotten through with meditation i worked on my Taijutsu. I started out by kicking the air as quick as possible, but sadly I fell. I quickly got back up and kept going. I then went to punching and then to the combination. 'Kick, kick double kick, kick kick double kick.... punch!' I stated reapetidly in my head. I kept going for at least an hour straight, forgetting about the whole time limit myfather had given me.

"Ventriloquism Teqnique!" I yelled, immediately conserving my chakra. It tookme about 5 good minutes bt i finally conserved enough. Once i had gotten ready to release i made a mistake and let some go. Eventually when I had opened my mouth to let it out, it exploded in my face and i was sent flying. I hit the ground hard and slowly got up with a sigh. I then jumpe back up with dterminatin sricking through my body and into my eyes.I then started out witht he combination once again and tried using the bellavoice. My skin turned a slight pale, paler than before, and my eyes a slight green hue. But then it dissapeared. It only lasted for about 2 seconds.

"I know...I am going to fail..." I said aloud, tears ready to pour down my eyes. It was already sundown and I then ran home for a scream in my face from my father for missing the time limit.

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[Yamanaka Ino]

Okay, I'm sorry to say, but in it's current state it would have to be rejected. Everything is too vague and short,needing a lot more detail and explanation. Furthermore, you have a kekkai genkai....but don't have any info on it. Sound is not a release either UNLESS you are making that your kekkai genkai....in which you're going to have to fill out the templates for a kekkai genkai and clan and all that. Same with custom jutsus; there is a format you have to follow for those.

[angelliccupcake]

Un, i got the kekkai genkai from one of the posts. I'll add on! >w<

[angelliccupcake]

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[Yūhi Kurenai]

First off Welcome to Shinobi Raising, sorry about your previous problems with one of the clans that is no longer about on the site. Right review time since you appear to be done and I have been known to help Whams out with profiles and such around the site from time to time.

Face claim:

Vocloiad

Vocaloid

Appearance:

Ivy is 4 feet 7 inches, she is 79.2 pounds.

Before you go off and say that this is the average pounds for someone her size, but I am finding it a slightly unrealistic on the whole front. Every Naruto character is underweight, but that is them not the forum. Most females are slightly overweight even if they do not appear so. From my small research she should be around 90-115 pounds for her height and age. Be realistic please. Also because you are just stating two facts about Ivy the , between the height and weight should be replaced with an and.

On the topic of the name Ivy, it is not Japanese. Please get a Japanese name. Ivy does not really translate in Japanese well if you want to go with the Japanese version of that. Back on topic.

Everyone says she's short but she considers herself average.

You are drawing someone else in talking about your character when you say “Everyone” as if everyone is just going to look at your character and call her short. She is about average height for someone her age so why would anyone call her short? It doesn’t make sense. Then you go in talking about “She think” and that is not a description more of a personality issue all together.

Please make sure you hit the enter bottom when you want to separate what you want to say.

Her long light blue hair is mesmerizing to most people, it's almost white.

Once again you bring in people, get read of it. But the main issue I have in this sentence is long light blue hair. You have three adjective talking about one object. It should be “long, light blue hair.” The blue mods the hair, but the light is not separated because it mods the blue. The long is separate and mods the hair. Why do you have the white there? It makes no sense to me.

She keeps then in two pigtails when training and on missions but has it out on an occasional basis.

Between missions and but needs a , and the whole sentence is worded completely odd.
My example: She keeps her hair in two pigtails while training and during missions, but occasional she has her hair down to its full length. [Use my example and I shall smite you…]

Light blue orbs? You mean eyes? Because you said that her eyes are similar to her hair which is “white” or “blue”. You are pretty much confusing what your character looks like when you have two different colors of hair that is not expanded on other than “it almost white”. The slender part should be up in the first paragraph.

Clothing:
Crop top shirt: You realize that are many different types of versions of this shirt? Take Ino’s shirt for example: hers do not have sleeves in the Shippuuden story line. Also you realize that most of the Mist that we have seen in the anime/manga from the Haku Arc means that it SNOWS and a simple crop shirt is probably not suited for that type of weather. When you use or in a sentence it is not is capitalize. You speak more about the ribbon and her mother than anything in the second part.

Personality:
You have urked me extremely by simply suggesting that she is like Shino. Because you have mentioned this in your first part of the personality most of it going to be surrounded by this and it annoys me to no end. There is no need whatsoever to make a reference like that to a canon character. Your character would not even know who the hell he is period. Sooo you have a shy person, but on the other hands gets in trouble? Sorry it does not work that way either she a shy person or someone that gets in trouble. You are trying to form two ideas into her that really does not work at this stage. In the part about the academy shows that she a shy, but people that maintain focus in order to past without really doing in class work slightly the opposite here as well. Shinobis are design to work as a team from the academy. If they cannot work as a team then they are no use to the village. Before you go off and say that the academy exam in the Mist was design for only one Genin to past, which that was during Zabuza’s academy days and they did away with that all together. Zabuza was the last one to pass the academy that way. She is way to young for that era. All and all, I think your personality needs to be completely redone.

History:
-twitches- Mother is killed at 3 and she badly traumatized by it for four years until one day she finds a kitten and then she supper happy again. Sorry, but that tends to fall under the MarySue aspect of role playing. Most three year olds doesn’t understand death and murder in this aspect. You also have her rank as Genin, but not graduating so her rank would be an Academy Student? If she graduated please place it in there instead of her running around doing whatever she pleases and then going to the academy. Also it is very unlikely that the cat is going to follow her around on missions mainly because it would jeopardize the mission all together if she worrying about a cat that is following her and has no fighting abilities whatsoever.

Justu:
Juujuin Bunshin:Beast Human Clone – Inuzuka Clan tech. No.

Honestly? I do not believe that she is ready to be even considered into the medical field of the shinobi life. She is ten years old and doesn’t even appear to have graduated the academy yet. Unrealistic and you are just trying to be a Kakashi or Itachi character which is not going to work at all. She can have the voice jutsu, but the medical stuff she needs to learn in character at different age than ten.

Also please run through the profile and make sure you are using the right form of a word. Like raises hand is present tense and it needs to be past tense.